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Eternal Fire

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Rotting bodies,
Sunken eyes,
Broken necks,
And empty lies.
Wasted life
And pained expressions.
No reflection
And false impressions.
Bloody wrist
And bloody blade.
Burning soul
And sinfulness weighed.
Blackened tears
And lost desire.
Forgotten woes
And eternal fire.
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You have a great rhythm going in this piece. It almost has a sing-song rhythm, which makes it all the more haunting. I think there are a couple hiccups in this pattern. IF they are intentional, great, if not please be aware that this does draw your reader's attention to these breaks in the pattern. I think that you play with a lot of visceral imagery in this piece, but at time I wonder if you can stretch them a little farther.